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Just a little something quick for this exercise Just a little something quick for this exercise nurturing-narratives.deviantar…. I hope this will still count for the Stubborn Lovers prompt cuz I tried to be a little more creative with this. And it's 1:30 in the morning. I should be sleeping x3

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Haha.
Talk about going from obtuse to direct.  Those are some stakes.

I like it.  It's an interesting way for him to try avoid all the awkwardness of the situation. 

A couple of technical notes...
You mix your past and present tenses... you go from he spoke to he knocks in the next paragraph and back again.

And the last line, though appropriate just felt a little short or curt for tying the whole story off.

But interesting and very readable.